Goal 1: have the highest flying kite. We can have that because are kite is going to be light weighted.
Goal 2: have the longest flying kite we are going to make it balance so it can stay in the air.
Goal 3: have the smallest flying kite because in order to do all of the goals we got to have the smallest.
I appreciate the effort Jeremiah, but both you and I know this is not your best work. Your blog post was really short and really confusing. For example would you ever say, "have the smallest flying kite because in order to do all of the goals we got to have the smallest"? Does that make sense? Is that how you would say it if were having a conversation? Writing is just like a conversation. You want people to be clear and to understand you. How can you revise this so that I can understand the point you are trying to make?
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